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Her skin pale, taut, torn,
Her eyes cast at the mournful moon.
'How long,' She whispers,
Since the day bled out? Since
She'd been alone in the moonlight?
Broken wings folded neatly, she stood.
Bare feet on broken glass, blood
On the cold stone floor.
She looks up again, the shattered roof
Of the abandoned church.
The young priest shudders.
His words lose all meaning, fading
Into the echoes of her whimpers.
A thousand questions voiced at once.

She turns her head, black hair and lace
Falling gracefully around her pale face. With
A single tear drop of crimson blood.
She touches the place her wings once were.
'I...' Her words choke her. How long untill
She can fly again, laugh again, love again?
'I have fallen!' She hangs her head. Another tear.
A thousand discarded feathers mark her path to earth.
A thousand era's to death...
©2008-2009 ~flegling
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I've never written a poem before :)

im not sure... but i think it's about a fallen angel.

I don't do this often :]

well constructive critisism is always welcome...

so comment and ect. Please read it though lol

I wish i had a pretty picture to go with this lol
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I really liked it! You grabbed me from the preview window and I had to keep reading. Nice work!

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Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia.
~ E.L. Doctorow


Whenever you think your life is over, you have to realize that's the signal that a new era is beginning.
- =Snow-Machine
really, thanks :)

much appreciated...

thanks for the :+fav: aswelll

thanks lots

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please... i need feedback on my style... or lack there of lol
Thank you for sharing the poem! :D

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Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia.
~ E.L. Doctorow


Whenever you think your life is over, you have to realize that's the signal that a new era is beginning.
- =Snow-Machine
This is so beautiful. I'm trembling over here. It was a touching poem. :heart: and it was your first one? No way! :heart:
thanks.

yeh it was my first poem.

i don't know what to say. Thanks

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my first poem!!! :]
You're welcome. and I'm looking forward to the next on *whistle*
lol, if theres a next one. This one kinda wrote itself.

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my first poem!!! :]
Itself? he. let's hope the next one'll wrote itself too. :D
yep lets hope. but hey, no rush right :) and theres inspiration everywhere (there's a god damned rainbow outside XD)

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my first poem!!! :]

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